8th Rough Cut

Notes:

Music for beginning
Opening shot, too quick

Notes, go back to post on Pretty In Pink, say it was my intention to create intertextuality with the train creation
The

Submarine - Panning shot, also similar tone of music.
Wild Child - zooming out

Diegetic ambient sound.

Music video style cut to the beat, sound of drums

Sound of guitar -

Everything to a beat.

restart to voiceover

editing-wise like a music video

the large boost, gotta cut to that

don't hold the shot of Cosmic Heat Productions for too long

Cut between feet bit and top bit, cross cutting on the beat, also maintains narrative enigma

Keep fade in, diegetic sound, yawning, record sounds of a sleave

delay the voiceover

pacey track, some context

Cross-cutting

shots of Evie filling the frame as well, not just in splistscreen

massive wobble in the middle of the take Billy going out of the room of the door

Media language

Splitscreen switch between left and right of the cast titles

a RICHARD DANNENBERG FILM - a RICHARD DANNENBERG film

Cut down painted on titles

More zippier

Cut down six seconds onscreen

Door immediately slamming

cut first scene of Hickey, Simon & Jason

4, 5 seconds

keep bit of door partially open

"No, not blondes for starters today thank you."

Cut to morning but

cut off secretary pausing

cut away door going

key bit of walking in the middle

cross-cut "Morning", him going through open door, then to reaction on
then cut to walking in the middle, cut as soon as he is filling the lense

cut out shot of miss Thomas walking on her own

take out aerial shot of him walking up

when worried about creating jump cuts, use cross-cuts to give it more sense

cut away opening the door, and also the door closing behind him

when he walks into door

start when

end of hug with Dillon and end of pool balls are wobbly

as soon as the girl blows to cue

Keep it going

Locker crucial moment, create loop

Crop the shot, and then loop it

Multiple split

Don't be so unsubtle with the sexuality

Show Evie waving first, then Hannah reacts.

Sliver of clip when Hugh and Rachel walk through the door

Get timing right.

Transform wider shot of Hannah face in hands

sharp the cut to the main title

use crossword title font palace, crossword font

Candelabra

Don't hammer the audience too hard.